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What was specifically revised from one draft to another?
- In my original draft, my introduction and conclusion were very spread out an did not focus on the purpose of the paper. After much revision, I finally managed to develop an introduction that drew the reader in using rhetoric and addressed why these strategies are important when publishing things within the field.
Point to global changes: how did you reconsider your thesis or organization?
- My thesis stayed pretty much the same throughout, with some small changes here and there. The most notable changes came from how I organized my paper. Originally, my paragraphs were all over the place; similar topics were separated by new topics and nothing was connected. Once I followed the format presented in my thesis statement everything began to flow smoothly.
What led you to these changes? A reconsideration of audience? A shift in purpose?
- The purpose of this assignment was to explain to an incoming freshman the importance of rhetoric. With my original organizational structure my purpose became unclear and confusing. By rearranging it I was able to better aid my audience in understanding why rhetoric is important.
How do these changes affect your credibility as an author?
- Through effective organizational skills I establish more credibility to myself as an author. By delivering my points concisely and in an easy to understand manner my audience can comprehend the points right away. Showing that I am able to get my point across establishes credibility to myself.
How will these changes better address the audience or venue?
- As incoming freshmen, too much information can often overwhelm their brains (A phenomena that I am currently experiencing as a freshman). By simplifying the ideas that I need to explain it will be much easier for them to understand. They will also see the importance of rhetoric and how it will apply to what they do in their field.
Point to local changes: how did you reconsider sentence structure and style?
- For the most part, my sentence structure didn't have too many issues. There were a few times throughout my paragraphs that the excessive use of pronouns cause the meaning to get lost. I addressed this by restating the subject or the point at hand to make the paragraphs clearer.
How will these changes assist your audience in understanding your purpose?
- By restating the subjects or points throughout, my audience is able to understand what I am discussing. They can pinpoint the specific points I have on rhetorical strategies and why they were or were not effective.
Did you have to reconsider the conventions of the particular genre in which you are writing?
- The conventions of a rhetorical analysis are something that has been drilled into my head for years. It is much easier to write a conventional essay because I've been able to practice doing it for so much longer. I only needed to reconsider my audience because I was focusing more on the issues of the documentary rather than why the rhetorical strategies were important when making an argument.
Finally, how does the process of reflection help you reconsider your identity as a writer?
- I now know that I have a tendency to be ambiguous when writing, causing my purpose to become lost. In future projects I will need to go back more frequently to reread my sentences in order to see if they make sense and deliver the point I am trying to make.
Reflection:
For this reflection I read through the posts of Samantha and Victoria. After reading through these reflections I've found that we all spent a significant amount of time reworking our theses and introductory paragraphs. This is probably because we spent so much class time discussing the importance of our intros and how we need to effectively draw our audience in. Victoria and I went about revising our papers in the same manner. We both felt our thesis statements were off to a strong start from the get go, so we focused our attention on creating paragraphs that coincided with our theses and shortening sentences to help our audience to understand better. Samantha took a different approach from myself. She spent a lot of time revising her thesis and straying away from the "cookie-cutter" format. It's always interesting to see how my peers go about revising and I hope they all did well on their essays.
Interesting that your thesis and introduction were able to stay the same throughout the revision process. For me, that was the area that needed the most revision, on top of adding more evidence to my body paragraphs. I also referred back to the original purpose of this assignment when revising. That always seems to be a very effective strategy since it reminds you exactly how you should be writing to fulfill a certain purpose.
ReplyDeleteI think my revision process definitely went a bit differently than yours. I wrote interesting and easily readable introductions and conclusions right from the get go. My problem, on the other hand, was making my thesis good enough to work well throughout my entire paper and indeed to draw it together. What I really struggled with was making my thesis be a good outline for the rest of my paper.
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